From:
Jacqueline
In
this photo we see a young girl age 17. Sitting on a bench in an almost
empty garden. She's
reaching out towards
a
stone fountain with a figure of a dragon on it. The Dragon symbolizes
the two cultures of childhood. The boy side, and the girl side.
The dragon being fantasy and adventure, which even now is seen as different for
little
girls.
The girl
sitting there reaching for the dragon is no longer a little girl, her
reaching out can be seen to represent her grasping for her lost
childhood,
for what she wanted but could not have. The girl almost
has a smile on her face, somewhat mischievous
like she knows what she's
doing is against
the rules, or societal
script.
In
the two cultures of childhood it
discusses how children who do not follow these rules are ostracized,
therefor
children, even from very young ages are conditioned to fit into the mold of their gender. Girls just like the
girl in the photo stray away from things that do not fit this standard of what a girl should
like.
Although
she is reaching for the dragon or the "boy" ideas, she
is otherwise very conforming to the ideal of a "girl" her hair is straightened,
she has a full face of makeup on and is also wearing very traditionally
feminine clothing. The culture tells
girls and boys that they have to strictly
conform to either one or the other in terms of the gender binary's
is showing that a girl doesn’t have to only adhere
to the very strict rules of society
but that she can make her own rules
1 comment:
From, Shaykiera
“The Dragon symbolizes the two cultures of childhood. The boy side and the girl side.” You could’ve instead wrote, “The dragon symbolized the male and female side of childhood culture.”, to lessen sentence fragmentation and connect the two.
“The Dragon being fantasy and adventure, which even now is different for little girls.” You could’ve instead wrote, “The dragon widely represents adventure and fantasy, which both concepts are elusive for young girls.”, then proceeded to elaborate on why these concepts can be elusive to just females.
“In the two cultures of childhood it discusses how children who do not follow these rules are ostracized … “ The phrase “The Two Cultures of Childhood” should be capitalized like so, then followed by the author’s name.
The remainder of the paragraph connects fine to the point that you are trying to make. You only should’ve elaborated more on certain points in the beginning, have a few grammatical errors, and forgotten a bibliography. Otherwise, your photo was beautifully executed and your overall point connected well to the excerpt “The Two Cultures of Childhood.”
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